Friday, 3 March 2017

Lost in the bush narrative

    Scorpion attack   
Aaaaaaaaa as I foll of the plan and into the scorpion jungle with Kahu and Jefe. I say we're in the scorpion jungle this is bad sase Kahu and I say you're right.and then 1000000 scorpions and 10 russell’s viper’s cercl
as l as one cilse jefe it was only me and Kahu and one brakebill vine above as there was only one hope.we hade to christ are hope and jump.and we wore on the vine it was breaking.we swang and jump bat landed on the scope in’s .all we remember was black and when we woke up. we wore in a r helicopter.         
                  BRAVE





12 comments:

  1. Awesome story Toby! The Russell's vipers sound scary!

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  2. WOW! Toby i like your writing next time could you make sure all the words are spelt correctly?

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  3. That was really interesting I'd like to read on. I like how you said,just the 10000 scorpians and 10 russel vipers circel me and kahu

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  4. Great Toby this shows how much you enjoyed writing this. I really like the writing. Keep it up.

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  5. Great work toby. I can tell you have tried hard. This is a good piece of writing. it is really cool and it looks like you have been doing well in your writing.

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  6. super scare and super cool!!

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  7. good work toby that is very intersting

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  8. i like your work Toby but you cant comment your self ok

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